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JM Hill's avatar

Love this as well, and one of the reasons I'm interested in the Sneaky Artist is to improve my observations skills in order to improve my writing.

Couple on the bench:

He looked away from her. The sun warmed his thighs and the bench insulted one particular vertebrae. They'd come here to talk away from the children.

Sheila sat too close for what she was saying. That it wasn't working. That she wasn't happy. She droned on and on, being diplomatic, while the sun shone and the birds chirped and he knew she would be leaving him in that blunt polite way of hers. He pictured himself taking his visits with the kids here in this very park.

He agreed with her. She pulled her long hair to one side. He pulled his hat down to shade his eyes. It was very bright. The day had made everything clear.

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Recording for a future self:

Clarissa was going through some things. She was fresh out of school (and a relationship), feeling jaded, and had just moved to a city where she didn’t know a soul. After a particularly horrid meeting (that really should’ve been an email), she clocked out early and fled for the serenity of a nearby park.

Not knowing what else to do, she pulled out her phone and started recording a voice message (a trick she learned from her always-just-soooo-together older sister) to keep as a reminder for later.

“Clarissa, I know…,” she whispered, almost bursting into tears. She pressed stop, and waited a minute to collect her thoughts. She looked around at the other people. What were they doing at the park at 11am? Were they having an existential crisis like she was?

Gathering up what seemed like the last ounce of emotional strength she had, she pressed record again. She spoke from the heart.

“Clarissa, I know life is hard right now. Growing up can really suck, but you’re tougher than you think. Everything is going to be okay.”

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